2020 Halloweensie Contest It's time once again for Susanna Hill's Halloweensie contest. (10 years and going strong!) The challenge: write a kid-friendly story of 100 words or fewer, incorporating the prompt words. This year's words are: skeleton, creep, mask. So, naturally my thoughts turned to these cute little bandits: THE TRASH BANDIT by Carrie Karnes-Fannin Under a thin, dark moon, the masked bandit creeps (hand over hand) along a thieves’ highway strung above dented and dusty trashcans filled with skeletons of meals past. Gripping the humming, thrumming wires, she stops, (swaying so slightly) and peeks through frosted panes into the (strange, still) wood and stone dens of furless two-legged beasts. A silent shadow, she takes what’s needed, and washes her bandit’s hands of the rest. Then, (unseen by the tame, yawning tomcat), the masked thief shakes her striped tail and steals back into the (singing, thriving) oh-so-wild night. (96 words)
29 Comments
Kalee
10/29/2020 06:09:44 am
Watch out for those furless 2 legged monsters!! :)
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
10/29/2020 06:33:55 am
Ha-ha!! Exactly!
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Elizabeth Volkmann
10/29/2020 07:12:13 am
Love those 'bandits'! Love this poem!
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
10/29/2020 11:16:46 am
Thank you, Elizabeth!
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Shannon Nelsen
10/29/2020 07:50:06 am
Ooo. Creepy and cute! Beautiful poem, Carrie!
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
10/29/2020 11:17:47 am
Thank you, Shannon! "Creepy & cute" --that sums raccoons up, doesn't it? lol. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Melissa Miles
10/29/2020 03:56:55 pm
Now I feel dumb for not immediately thinking of racoons! Lol. Great story.
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10/29/2020 10:25:26 pm
Carrie, you've captured the masked bandit so visually and brilliantly. I especially liked the phrases you inserted in parentheses. Beautiful writing!
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
10/31/2020 11:04:30 am
Thank you, Jill! I appreciate you stopping by & commenting. It was a fun little project.
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10/29/2020 10:58:54 pm
Beautiful! I love the way this is formatted. It makes for a fun read aloud.
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Margaret Aitken
10/30/2020 06:12:29 pm
I absolutely love your structure—It really mirrors the creeping of the masked bandit! Beautiful language too :-)
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
10/31/2020 10:57:32 am
Thank you! That creeping-along-the-wire was what I was going for with the arrangement, so it's good to know that came across.
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
10/31/2020 10:57:50 am
Thank you!
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10/31/2020 04:12:15 pm
Love your evocative imagery and the asides! Beautifully atmospheric.
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Jilanne Hoffmann
10/31/2020 06:10:53 pm
I really like the unusual structure of this story. The punctuation and syntax really add to the narrative. Well done!
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
11/1/2020 05:34:04 am
Thank you, Jilanne--I'm glad you enjoyed it. I love the way words look on a page as much as how they sound, so it was fun to play with the arrangement.
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Monica E Acker
11/1/2020 08:14:38 am
I can feel the creeping of the trash bandit in the rhythm you have created. Well done!
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
11/1/2020 08:21:46 am
Thank you, Monica! It's so nice to know it came thru in the piece. It was a fun challenge.
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Nancy Derey Riley
11/1/2020 02:58:18 pm
Nice job. Love trash bandits. Goos luck!
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11/1/2020 04:23:42 pm
What a lovely poem! I love the idea of following the bandits on Halloween!
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11/1/2020 08:19:40 pm
Love your way with language, Carrie, you've captured the bandit perfectly! Good luck. :)
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Carrie Karnes Fannin
11/2/2020 04:29:54 am
Thank you so much!
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Diantha Litwer
11/1/2020 10:12:06 pm
Wow! Love the imagery. Fantastic story!
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11/2/2020 02:18:02 pm
Love the use of your key words, and furless two-legged beasts! This story is so rich with so few words, excellent story! Thanks for sharing, Carrie!
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11/3/2020 08:25:52 am
Thank you so much, Kari! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Charlotte Dixon
11/11/2020 01:46:19 pm
Carrie, your story is fun, lyrical, and clever just like that rascally raccoon :) Well done lady!
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11/11/2020 06:58:19 pm
Thank you, Charlotte! You're always so supportive. I appreciate it a lot.
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