About this poem: I grew up in southern USA, where twilight is sometimes called "dark thirty." It's a magical time of day, with the sun glowing below the horizon, bats squeaking overhead, and fireflies dancing all around. When I saw this photo, I immediately thought of dark thirty and all the magic that exists for a kid during the twilight of their childhood. I hope it comes through at least a little bit in this piece. Thank you for reading! Let me know what you think in the comments.
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Halsey, Kathy
10/1/2022 08:14:22 am
I so so love this. Mystery, a special magical moment, and the invitation to the reader to believe and reach out! Plus fairy tales!!
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Carrie Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 08:57:36 am
Thank you, Kathy!
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10/1/2022 12:50:36 pm
Wonderful. The feeling is so vibrant and the references to other females changed by their fairytale circumstance is brilliant. Love it!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 04:25:15 pm
Thank you, Gayle! I've been reading a lot of fairy tales recently.
Molly Ippolito
10/1/2022 08:59:15 am
I love the mystery and wonder you capture in your entry! What a fun concept to tun into a full story one day!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 10:41:50 am
I can see it turning into a full-length book... :-)
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10/1/2022 09:34:53 am
Beautifully written with vivid language. I like how it is an instruction for writers about character arc. The one who goes through the door is not the same one that returns.
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 10:38:03 am
Wow, that is quite the compliment---thank you!
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Kaitlyn L Sanchez
10/1/2022 11:49:59 am
Chills. What a stunning ending and beautiful words. Thanks for sharing for the fall writing frenzy!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 12:09:02 pm
Thank YOU for bringing us this fun contest every year!
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Anne Lipton
10/1/2022 03:25:33 pm
Mood! A beautifully evocative story about the power of stories, including the most important of all—the story one weaves of oneself.
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 03:52:11 pm
Story is what binds us together, isn't it? Thank you for your kind comments.
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Charlotte Dixon
10/1/2022 03:46:03 pm
Carrie, I love the magic of possibilities in your lyrical poem. I loved "dark thirty" as a child and still do. My Mom had to chase me down at "dark thirty." I wanted to see beyond the end of the day. :) I'm still reaching!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 03:51:11 pm
Charlotte--your comment makes me so happy! I'm glad that some of what I wanted to express in this poem seems to be coming through, especially to someone like you who had a similar experience in childhood.
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10/1/2022 05:38:14 pm
This gave me goosebumps! And then, I reached the end and got more goosebumps for different reasons! I love the evocative language and the message. Nicely done!
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10/1/2022 05:44:58 pm
Carrie, that is so vivid and beautiful with references to so many classic tales!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 07:42:19 pm
Thank you!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/1/2022 07:42:47 pm
I'm so glad you liked it, Christina.
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10/2/2022 02:34:55 am
Oh WOW, Carrie! That was powerful, evocative, and empowering. Thank you for taking us to dark thirty, and through dark thirty.
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10/2/2022 06:49:45 pm
I'm so glad you like it, Beth! And thank you for being such an amazing & supportive writer in our kidlit community.
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Wendy Greenley
10/2/2022 11:46:46 am
Beautiful language, Carrie! (and you're right about Wendy's thirst for adventure ;))
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10/2/2022 03:25:08 pm
This is so evocative and inspiring! Makes me wanna go become a kick-butt fairytale heroine.
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/2/2022 06:48:04 pm
I'll get my cape and meet you at the corner. (We've all got a heroine waiting to break out.) :-)
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10/2/2022 07:23:51 pm
This is so excellent, Carrie! I love how it's spooky, magical, wistful, and wise. Nicely done!
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Karyn Curtis
10/3/2022 11:16:23 am
Wow, I love this empowered re-telling of old stories! Well done!
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10/3/2022 03:45:25 pm
It could only be me but I pictured a writer, at dawn (or dusk) jumbled thoughts in her head, trying to put words on paper =-) I love the cascading words in your phrases. It's visual a well as emotive. Beautifully done!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/3/2022 03:56:43 pm
Yes!! You get it. This comment is making me smile.
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Maryna Doughty
10/3/2022 09:48:25 pm
I love these lines:
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Jeannie
10/4/2022 12:34:22 am
Outstanding!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/7/2022 08:17:18 am
Thank you, Jeannie! I appreciate you stopping by and reading.
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Judith Zeilenga
10/4/2022 06:43:18 am
Amazing references to characters who have been trasnformed. Love this! ❤️
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/7/2022 08:16:47 am
Thank you, Judith!
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Steve Jankousky
10/4/2022 12:40:32 pm
OMG! I love SO much of the imagery in this! The mildly sardonic tone of some of the lines, the way the rhythm propels the reader forward. It's extraordinary!
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Melisa Wrex
10/4/2022 01:32:11 pm
I couldn't decide whether this was dusk or dawn either when I chose this photo as my inspiration. In the end, it wasn't pivotal in my story, but it's funny how certain things stand out.
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Ryann Jones
10/6/2022 08:42:08 pm
Mind blown! So good. :) Love how this turned out!
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Carrie S Karnes-Fannin
10/7/2022 08:15:16 am
Thank you! I appreciated your critique help along the way.
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